tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1667173462753211299.post5804928617173858897..comments2023-01-01T08:24:11.147+00:00Comments on Catholic Scot: Christ Riding Into Jerusalem- A PoemCatholic Scothttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01820688010421857488noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1667173462753211299.post-81863543817652587532014-06-14T22:36:36.410+01:002014-06-14T22:36:36.410+01:00Nearly done! Yours is of course not any sort of pl...Nearly done! Yours is of course not any sort of plagiarism - but it *is* an emotional inversion of Chesterton's - in his, Palm Sunday is the centre of reality for a creature otherwise misunderstood by people who only see appearances - in yours, for the spectators at least, Palm Sunday is an appearance, which ignores more difficult realities elsewhere. So maybe he was sort of knocking about in the back of your head.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04547218267037441322noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1667173462753211299.post-28714756342384476352014-06-14T22:13:53.570+01:002014-06-14T22:13:53.570+01:00Silly me - simply this: http://www.poetryfoundatio...Silly me - simply this: http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poem/177440Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04547218267037441322noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1667173462753211299.post-62284456993936174962014-06-14T21:36:39.637+01:002014-06-14T21:36:39.637+01:00Not read much Chesterton recently no. I'm not ...Not read much Chesterton recently no. I'm not sure what your reminded off, it might be what George Harrison would have called unconcious plagiarism of something or other.Catholic Scothttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01820688010421857488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1667173462753211299.post-59946591467241162442014-06-14T21:32:36.437+01:002014-06-14T21:32:36.437+01:00Thanks for the feedback. The colt is a reference b...Thanks for the feedback. The colt is a reference back to the prophecy of Zechariah so it kind of has to stay for theological reasons. I fiddled around with the on tongues/on colt thing for a while and couldn't come up with a better arrangement but I'm sure its possible to do so. Arguably goth is a derivative of Catholic sensibility, anyway we do the Passion big and strong and I'm content with that, again for theological reasons.Catholic Scothttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01820688010421857488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1667173462753211299.post-15433187299680671202014-06-14T21:17:46.611+01:002014-06-14T21:17:46.611+01:00PS Have you been reading lots of Chesterton? - rem...PS Have you been reading lots of Chesterton? - remind me what I'm being reminded of....Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04547218267037441322noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1667173462753211299.post-10043468320475157272014-06-14T21:07:30.185+01:002014-06-14T21:07:30.185+01:00Mmmm - narratively interesting, I always enjoy a g...Mmmm - narratively interesting, I always enjoy a good bit of foreshadowing and importantly doesn't at all rhyme, which is usually a massive improvement unless one is careful. Not being a first century Palestinian, I kept getting distracted by the fact that colts are usually scary American guns these days, but that could well just be me (except perhaps at: His name was on every tongue/<br />As He was on His colt - which is a bit too literal in the second line to work). I liked 'Jerusalem knows better' and the politics of it. I like the arc of the end, but it's perhaps a little *too* goth in its execution - if you shade it back a bit it might have more power. Nice to have more to get teeth into than with the haikus.<br /><br />[Caveat: this from me, who writes a poem once in a blue moon, and then is always a little disappointed to find it not hailed as a work of total genius.]Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04547218267037441322noreply@blogger.com